Too Reckless

In the afternoon, Ah Guan squatted on the balcony and smoked a pack of cigarettes. There was no sun or rain outside. The gloomy weather made the balcony as hot as a steamer, and the beads of sweat kept rolling down.

An aunt who was going to the park passed by the alley, walked out and backed up, looked up, and said with concern:

"Wa'er, you're still young, and your daughter-in-law ran off to introduce one to you. Don't think about such a sign."

A Guan pinched off the cigarette **** in his hand and smiled:

"I don't have a wife yet."

"Oh... don't think about it if the subject runs away..."

"I don't have a girlfriend either."

Ah Guan said it very naturally, but I don't know why he couldn't laugh.

I originally wanted to explain that I was just thinking about the plot, but when I looked up, I saw the sympathy in Auntie's eyes.

"If you can't find a partner, why don't you go out more? Hide here to smoke, and the object can run into your house by herself? Now these dolls, alas..."

Lopsided.

Ah Guan squatted on the balcony to shut himself up and smoked half a pack of cigarettes.

Finally, when I looked back, the monitor that was on as long as I was awake, which was more stuffy than the weather, suddenly felt more comfortable.

After all, the brothers and sisters in front of the screen can definitely understand why Ah Guan is squatting on the balcony to shut himself up on a hot day.

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The above is purely made up (but Aguan really has no object).

I asked for a day off. I was not satisfied with what I wrote recently. After thinking about it carefully, the problem was in the 'emotional' aspect.

That is, there is no emotional resonance, and it cannot make readers feel happy, lost, excited, moved, etc. emotions.

It feels like writing a report. The protagonist has obtained something and met someone. He is just writing one thing in detail. After reading it, he understands what happened. I have read it, and then it is gone.

This is definitely not possible, so we have to adjust it, and try to get the state back in the next small plot.

Hope you all understand o!