Wizards are mighty.

Chapter 227

After getting the affirmation from Vic and the illusory Vic, the Q version of Vic continued to introduce the subsequent content in the Book of the World.

"Enter Hogel City, start refining staffs, and make money through alchemy, and upgrade to level 9. Describe the life of the lower class, interact with caravans, gradually gain fame, and be wooed by nobles, etc., a total of 11 months."

"There will be foreshadowing here. A very large earthquake occurred in Hogle City in April."

"Well, this part has a rich plot and reasonable logic."

“Sean’s experience in Hoggle City shows his growth, but the refining and alchemy process can be more detailed, such as the selection of staff materials and the difficulties in making them, the materials, formulas and key steps of alchemy. The earthquake foreshadowing can dig deeper into the impact on the city in many aspects and its connection with the subsequent story.”

“At the same time, the description of Hogle City can be more detailed, including its unique status, surrounding situation, tense atmosphere, and daily life scenes, so that high-dimensional observers can better understand the city.”

"Then, the war begins, and people volunteer to become logistics professionals, and are tempted by huge profits to follow the army to attack. This describes psychology, and at the same time, it can also describe the concerns and conscription scenarios of many ordinary people."

"The plot here is logical and in line with the character's personality. The protagonist's participation in the war reflects his bravery and aggressiveness, and his participation in the attack with the army shows the complexity of human nature. Psychological description is crucial, and the protagonist's various complex emotions about the war should be portrayed more delicately to deeply show his motivation. At the same time, describing the relevant content of ordinary people can enrich the background of the story and allow high-dimensional observers to feel the widespread impact of the war."

"After that, Sean set off. He described the war scenes, the burning, killing, looting, various military situations, etc., and explained the settings. It took two months."

"During this period, I wrote the cliffhanger again, the lettering, the foreshadowing, etc. It took a total of 6 months."

“The description of war scenes is an important part, which can reflect the cruelty of war, and the relevant settings and foreshadowing increase suspense. However, the details of the war can be described in more detail, such as the postures of soldiers, the use of weapons, etc., to enhance the sense of involvement of high-dimensional observers.”

"Return to Toby City, enter the city after it is broken, describe the tragic situation in the city, meet the little girl before, her grandfather has been killed, solve the problem, describe the psychological activities, give help, and let her escape."

"This plot can arouse emotional resonance. The tragic situation in the city and the little girl's experience show the destructive power of war. The tragic situation in the city can be described in more detail, and the protagonist's psychological activities should also be more in-depth, showing his sympathy for the little girl and hatred of war."

"After that, I arrived at Theresa City and found that my enemy was dead. I was deeply moved and upgraded to level 10."

“This part of the plot is dramatic and fits the fantasy setting, but Sean’s reaction could be more detailed, such as the complex interweaving of emotions and the impact on subsequent behavior, to make the plot more substantial.”

I took a look at the Q version of Vic, and then it was time to continue the battle.

"Continue to follow the army in the battle, describing the protagonist's performance in killing enemies, as well as his spells, alchemy practice, etc., and also describing alchemy in passing. This will take one month. July."

"These contents can show the growth of the protagonist, but the description of killing the enemy should also be described in more detail, such as spell skills, weapon use, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better understand the protagonist's strength improvement."

"Later, the fortress battle took place, describing the battle situation and form. After a month of hard fighting, a tragic victory was achieved. The brutality of the fortress battle and the war deployment were described, as well as the protagonist's actions, etc. He reached level 11 and entered the Wagner Kingdom. He fought for another half a month, and it took nine months."

“The fortress battle is a key plot, and the relevant description can reflect the intensity of the war and the reasonable upgrade of the protagonist. The description of the battle situation and the protagonist’s actions can be more detailed, such as the comparison of troop strength and the protagonist’s decision-making, so that high-dimensional observers can better feel the war process.”

"Then there will be a ceasefire and distribution of benefits."

"Not long after, news of a ceasefire came, and according to merit, he was rewarded with 200,000 gold coins."

"These contents are in line with the logic of the story development and are an affirmation of the protagonist's contribution."

"Of course, we can also describe in more detail the protagonist's reaction to the news and the gold coins, such as his joy and plans for the future, so that high-dimensional observers can better understand the protagonist's mentality."

The Q version of Vic's description made Vic and the imaginary Vic nod with satisfaction.

After all, the Q version of Vic was created at the request of the "author". At present, there is no abnormal situation, and no information from a higher narrative level has been received.

That means the "author" is quite satisfied with the Q version of Vic.

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Then, Q version of Vic continued to comment on the contents of the Book of the World.

"Go to Theresa City to study and practice alchemy. Level up to 12. The duration is 4 months. Describe the situation in the city, various relationships, etc. Describe daily life as detailed as possible. End of December"

"Well, the protagonist's experience in Theresa City opens up new space for the story."

"The secluded learning and alchemy upgrades here are reasonable and in line with the growth trajectory."

“Descriptions of the city’s conditions and daily life are also necessary to enrich the worldview and character images.”

“However, more attention should be paid to details when describing the city, such as the characteristics and contradictions of the forces in the city, the emotions and conflicts of interests of the characters, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better integrate into the urban environment.”

"On the eve of the Ice and Snow Festival, the nobles came to visit and brought with them the elven slave Xilia. They talked with the protagonist (from the slave's perspective) and negotiated for interests (using bargaining skills). After consideration, the protagonist accepted the invitation and joined the nobles."

“The plots are interesting and complex, introducing elements of nobility, slaves, and profit games.”

“Also, the dialogue from the slaves’ perspective is novel and can enrich the relationships between the characters.”

"Of course, the description of the interest game can be more detailed, showing the protagonist's thinking process, decision-making basis, and the nobles' motives and methods."

"At the same time, the protagonist appears with the nobles at the Ice and Snow Festival, and describes the story with the maid Celia on the eve of the Ice and Snow Festival."

“This part can enrich the protagonist’s emotional life and social activities.”

"The story before the Snow Festival can pave the way for the relationship between the two. The plot during the Snow Festival can show the protagonist's status and image changes in the aristocratic circle. After that, he will be immersed in glory for a period of time, become a little lazy, and increase the interaction with the maid."

“It’s also quite human here, reflecting the character of the protagonist.”

"The slackness after achieving success and the increased interaction with the maids can allow high-dimensional observers to gain insight into the protagonist's emotional world and character weaknesses."

“Also, when describing slacking, it is possible to be more specific about the behavioral and psychological changes.”

“The plot after that is very simple.”

"One month after joining, I encountered a hostile force in the city. We had a brief fight, but I suffered a loss and left. After returning, I suddenly realized my mistake and felt a greater sense of urgency."

“This plot advances the story and makes the protagonist realize his own shortcomings.”

“The fighting process can be described in detail, such as the skills and tactics used by both sides, as well as the protagonist’s psychological activities after suffering a loss, highlighting his growth and transformation.”

(End of this chapter)