Shadow Apostle

It took me a month to read the whole book from scratch and found many fundamental problems.

First, the most terrifying thing is that the main line has not been established. So the protagonist's fragmented actions appeared, a hammer in one place and a stick in the other. You don't understand what the protagonist wants to do, let alone why he wants to do it. I do understand, but if you don't understand, it won't make any sense for me to understand. This is a typical main line blur. The reason is that I have been hiding the main line from the beginning and not showing it properly. Now it has become an unsolvable problem.

And here comes a bigger problem. Even trying to remedy it now is useless, because the main plot is to resurrect Beef Soup, but the character of Beef Soup has not been established. Most people think that she is a monster with unknown meaning. monster. And this problem is also unsolvable, because in the first few volumes, she was just a mindless little monster, and it was difficult to establish a character. Then the subsequent resurrection of her became inexplicable, so there was no main line. .

In short, I designed a main line that was impossible to stand up, and then ran all the way to the collapse of the main line.

The second problem is that there is also a problem with the character design. I confused the concepts of greed and stinginess. A greedy protagonist may be interesting, but a stingy protagonist is meaningless. In this regard, people set up things quite quickly.

The third and fourth things are criticized by many people. The description fails to grasp the key points and the plot framework is bloated and complicated. I have some experience in this regard recently.

After discussing it with the editor, I completely overturned it and rewrote it. It won’t be long before I meet you all again, um... in another way.