What are you doing, Mr. President? I'm just an extra!

3 PM, Jianghai City Central Commercial Street.

Lu Li, along with Ji Hanyue and Bai Xiaolu, merged into the bustling crowd.

This was the first time in thirty years that the Sect Master of the Supreme Palace of Forgetfulness had walked into the mortal world as an "ordinary person".

Passing by a boutique jewelry store, Ji Hanyue stopped in front of the display wall, picked up a white pearl hair clip, and turned to Lu Li to ask, "What is this for?"

Lu Li didn't say anything, but took the hair clip from her hand, took half a step forward, and pinned the pearl hair clip to the stray hairs on Ji Hanyue's right side.

As Lu Li secured the hair clip, his fingertips gently brushed against her earlobe.

Slightly cool, soft.

Ji Hanyue's body stiffened noticeably, and the tips of her fair, jade-like ears turned a rosy hue at a visible speed.

Less than ten meters from the jewelry store, a young man dressed in trendy clothes strode over and blocked Ji Hanyue's path.

"Beautiful lady, are you alone?"

Can we add each other on WeChat?

Ji Hanyue's face suddenly darkened, and the temperature around her body instantly dropped to freezing point. Her right hand hung down at her side, and cold air began to gather.

Lu Li cursed under his breath, took a step forward, grabbed Ji Hanyue's wrist, and pulled her behind him...

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## 【Question 4】

**[Problematic Statement]:** "Half an hour later, the three rushed back to Building A, No. 17 Wenlan Road. With a bang, the door was kicked open."

**[Problem Description]:** The time jumps are too abrupt.

One scene shows Shen Weilan secretly taking photos in the commercial street and Ji Hanyue fainting, and the next scene jumps directly to the corridor of Building A. The half-hour drive in between is only explained in one sentence, which is too abrupt and lacks necessary transitional scenes.

**Impact on completion rate: Abrupt scene transitions can easily cause readers to feel disoriented.**

**[Suggestions and Directions for Revision]:** Add 1-2 sentences of transitional description to explain how Lu Li carried the unconscious/semi-conscious Ji Hanyue away from the commercial street and took a taxi/drived back to Building A, enhancing the continuity of the scene.

**[Example of modification]:**

Lu Li scooped Ji Hanyue up in his arms and growled at Bai Xiaolu, "Call a car!"

Ji Hanyue leaned against him, her breathing growing weaker and weaker, and her body temperature continuing to drop.

Ignoring the stares from passersby, Lu Li strode to the roadside and shoved her into the taxi he had just hailed.

No. 17 Wenlan Road!

quick!"

Half an hour later, the three rushed back to Building A.

With a bang, the door was kicked open.

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## 【Question 5】

**[Problem Statement]:** "She turned her head, her pale purple eyes coldly sweeping over Lu Li. She didn't refute. Because after searching for five minutes, she really couldn't figure out which opening to slip into this fabric without ties or buttons."

**[Problem Description]:** While this description has a charming contrast effect, **Ji Hanyue's reaction after hearing Lu Li's words is too bland**, merely "glancing at him coldly" + "not refuting him," lacking emotional depth.

According to the previous setting, Ji Hanyue has already shown obvious emotional fluctuations in response to Lu Li's feelings (such as blushing during the hot spring incident and freezing up after hearing "the world is beautiful"). Here, there should be a more subtle reaction.

**Impact on follow-up reading: Weakening the sense of progression in the characters' emotional arcs**

**[Suggestions and Directions for Modification]:** Add micro-expressions or body language to Ji Hanyue to show her concern and annoyance towards Lu Lisheng, thus enhancing the subtle changes in their relationship.

**[Example of modification]:**

She turned her head and gave Lu Li a cold look with her pale purple eyes.

The tips of her fair, jade-like ears were slightly flushed.

She did not refute it.

Because she searched for five minutes and still couldn't figure out which opening to slip into this fabric that had no ties or buttons.

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## 【Question 6】

**[Problem Statement]:** "[Holy crap...] After taking off that aloof and distant long-sleeved dress, Ji Hanyue's ethereal aura that kept people at a distance faded by more than half, replaced by a breathtakingly stunning beauty."

**【Problem Description】:** Lu Li's inner monologue was too simplistic and blunt, consisting of only the word "Holy crap," lacking the **complaining details and lecherous traits typical of Lu Li's character.**

According to the previous setting, Lu Li's thoughts when he sees a beautiful woman should be richer, more interesting, and more in line with his character (such as looking at Su Feiyan's legs, Gu Qingcheng's waist, and Yang Ningbing's beauty mark).

**Impact on follow-up reading: Weakening the distinctiveness of Lu Li's character**

**[Suggestions and Directions for Modification]:** Enrich Lu Li's inner monologues, adding more witty remarks and lewd comments that fit his character. Also, compare Ji Hanyue's ancient and modern attire to enhance the contrast.

**[Example of modification]:**

"Holy crap... Is this still the same icy sect leader who's always freezing people to death?"

[After she took off her flowing long dress, half of her aloof, ethereal aura vanished!]

The high-necked sweater accentuates her waistline, a side braid hangs over her collarbone, and wisps of hair fall beside her ears… If she walked on the campus of Jianghai University, she would steal Wei Lan's title of pure and alluring campus beauty in no time!

[No, this isn't just stealing a title, this is a complete annihilation!]

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Lu Li saw Shen Weilan's lip movements and felt a chill run down his spine.

This scheming sister-in-law is really not picky; she even dares to step on the landmines of the Supreme Palace of Forgetfulness!

Just as he was about to rush over and grab the phone, the wrist he was holding in his palm suddenly cooled down.

[How come this temperature is the same as liquid nitrogen?!]

Lu Li turned around abruptly and saw that Ji Hanyue's face was as pale as paper.

Twenty meters away, Shen Weilan seemed to have also noticed the abnormality—her finger hovered above the send button, and she looked over through her mask, a hint of hesitation flashing in her eyes.

But the next second, Ji Hanyue stumbled and fell forward.

Lu Li ignored Wei Lan and quickly grabbed Ji Hanyue's waist, pulling her into his arms.

The moment I put it in, even through my thick sweater, it was freezing cold.

[Damn it! The extreme cold energy is flowing backward!]

[Return to Building A! Immediately!]

"Meal ticket, what happened to Master?"

Bai Xiaolu even forgot about the cotton candy in her hand and came closer with wide eyes.

"Stop talking nonsense, call a car!"

Lu Li scooped Ji Hanyue up in his arms.

Ji Hanyue leaned against him, her breathing growing weaker and weaker, and her body temperature continuing to drop.

Ignoring the stares from passersby, Lu Li strode to the roadside and shoved her into the taxi he had just hailed.

"No. 17 Wenlan Road! Hurry!"

Half an hour later, the three rushed back to Building A.

With a bang, the door was kicked open.

Ji Hanyue broke free from Lu Li's hand and stumbled into the bedroom, locking the wooden door behind her.

She sat cross-legged on the wooden couch, forcibly closing her eyes, trying to circulate the "Supreme Heart Sutra of Forgetfulness" to suppress the violent cold energy within her body.

"Heaven and earth are ruthless, treating all things like straw dogs..."