I, who tortured the readers, was knocked to the ground by them!

Chapter 10: Remuneration is about guidance

"wait."

Sato Wakaba gave a sly smile, finished the food in the bowl in two bites, turned around and went upstairs in a hurry, then ran back with a thud.

"Why are you always so energetic?"

Sakurai Itsuki was very curious, as the two of them went to bed at about the same time last night.

Sato Wakaba obviously got up much earlier than him, and not only prepared breakfast for him, but also sewed buttons for him.

But his mental state is still obviously much better than Sakurai Itsuki's.

"Let's not talk about this yet."

Sato Wakaba put her hand into her collar and said, "Well, this is my reward for making breakfast for you."

Sakurai Itsuki was suddenly shocked. Is this going to trigger some beneficial plot?
Come to think of it, she did say that she was quite handsome, could it be that...
Sakurai Itsuki swallowed and was hesitating whether to resist later.

Sato Wakaba suddenly took out a sketchbook from her collar.

"As a reward, please critique my comics from a professional perspective!"

She held the sketchbook in front of Sakurai Itsuki with both hands very sincerely.

"Why did you take it out of there?"

"Because it feels more like the second dimension, doesn't it? I think characters who like to pull guns out of skirts or swords from their chests are quite popular!"

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"Hey, why does the light in your eyes seem to have disappeared? Like a dead fish."

"That's called a critical gaze. Hand me the notebook."

Sakurai Itsuki took the notebook. Although he was a plagiarist, he was a professional student in his previous life and had information about so many works stored in his mind.

As the saying goes, even if you can't write poetry, you can still recite it.

There is nothing wrong with guiding a layman.

Sakurai Itsuki read the story in the book carefully.

Maybe because she was afraid of being harshly criticized, Sato Wakaba squatted nervously behind the coffee table opposite Sakurai Itsuki. She carefully stuck her head out and stared at Sakurai Itsuki, who was flipping through the manuscript with her light blue eyes.

"The storyline of a naive girl falling in love with a handsome, lonely guy is a bit too cliché."

The blue pupils suddenly contracted, and it felt as if someone had stabbed him in the back.

"Didn't I hear that this kind of plot is quite classic?"

She spoke with some stammering.

Sakurai Itsuki continued flipping through the manuscript and said, "The old-fashioned plot isn't a drawback. The drawback is that you can't keep people interested in reading it once they understand the general outline of your plot.

It’s like everyone knows Luffy is going to be the Pirate King, but everyone still continues to watch.

You see, the hero here is supposed to be a lonely teenager, while the heroine is a cheerful and heartless girl.

Why is there a line where the heroine is upset because someone complained about her messy hair, and the hero yells in front of the whole class, "Don't comment on other people's style like that!"?

Sakurai Itsuki couldn't help but question.

"Well, well, I just wanted to show that the heroine is cheerful but also very fragile, and that the hero is very lonely but sometimes very brave!"

Sato Wakaba defended herself in a low voice, but compared to her usual confident and carefree tone, she didn't sound confident at all.

"That's not how it's supposed to be presented. Your character logic and story logic are a mess."

".oh."

"As for the storyboard and composition, I have no idea what you are trying to express."

"Oh"

"And you've only got one chapter, but you've crammed in a dozen well-known characters. How are readers supposed to remember all the characters you drew? Readers don't read comics like they're a textbook, unraveling them over and over again."

"Oh."

"So, this thing of yours can't even be called a comic."

Sakurai Itsuki happened to look up and saw the golden head on the coffee table opposite him with a pout on his face and his fingers on the edge of the coffee table, looking pitiful.

"Well, at least your drawing is pretty good. The lines are smooth, and the characters are recognizable! The scenes are also okay. For example, this flower pot is very delicate."

Sakurai Itsuki suddenly realized that his criticism of a manga newbie was a bit too sharp, so he temporarily raised the emotional intelligence of his remarks. "Overall, there is still room for improvement."

However, he had already been scolded harshly, and it would be difficult to undo the damage done by someone with high emotional intelligence.

Who knew that Sato Wakaba nodded when she heard this, and then jumped out from behind the coffee table excitedly.

"Haha, I told you, I'm quite talented at drawing!"

She put one hand on her waist and made a "Yeah!" gesture with the other, speaking confidently with her chest puffed out.

"Guys with energy skills are really powerful." Sakurai Itsuki sighed.

"Listen carefully, a cartoonist is someone who can support themselves with their writing. So the pictures you draw should not only please yourself, but also please your readers!"

Sakurai Itsuki warned.

"But your comics never make your readers happy. Don't your readers always call you a beast and want to kill you with a truck?"

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"Ahem, sorry, sorry, please continue." Sato Wakaba looked at Sakurai Itsuki and coughed twice awkwardly.

Sakurai Itsuki took out his cell phone, opened the document he had originally submitted, and held it up to the girl at the coffee table opposite.

"First, you have to draw the name."

"Oh, I know, I know. Name means storyboard, right? I saw someone introduce it online."

"Yes, although the first submission requires you to show the editor the finished manuscript, the name is something you must draw before drawing the manuscript."

Sakurai Itsuki held up his phone and slid his name to her.

"You can think of a name as a rough draft of a comic. Although most names are very sloppy, they can show the development of the plot and determine the position of the comic's frames and the content to be drawn in each frame.

This way the editor will know the general content of your chapter. Otherwise, it would be too time-consuming to just draw the original picture and then ask the editor to revise it. "

Although Sato Wakaba already had a general idea of what Name was about, she still sat down and listened attentively.

"Before drawing the name, I also recommend that you make some basic settings, but when making the settings, you should also consider your own shaping ability."

"For example, you design a grand worldview and a brilliant character with a big vision. But as you're drawing, you realize you're actually dumb and can't draw a character with that kind of grand vision, nor can you bring that grand story to a close. The story will instantly fall apart."

Perhaps because he was the one who had eaten the man's food, Sakurai Itsuki's explanation was very thorough.

"I'm not stupid." Sato Wakaba muttered softly.

Sakurai Itsuki wanted to say that the plot and dialogue just now were stupid, but after thinking about it, he realized that his academic performance was almost unilaterally crushed by Sato Wakaba.

Although being smart has no decisive relationship with good grades.

But, a person who scored 29 points said to a person who scored 92 points, you are so stupid.

That's still a bit too abstract.

So Sakurai Itsuki swallowed his words and started talking about submission again.

"If you submit a regular manuscript, you should prepare at least 31 pages of manuscript. It is best to express your character background and the general tone of your story.

It would be best if there was a small plot with ups and downs, and an interesting foreshadowing, and a few more pages would be fine."

Upon hearing this, Sato Wakaba's face was filled with worry. She counted on her fingers, "In 31 pages, I have to express the character design, the background setting, the story tone, and complete a small plot. The small plot also has to have ups and downs, and there has to be a foreshadowing. Can 31 pages really do so much?"

"Of course, but a cartoonist like that is probably at the top of the industry. Most newcomers just have to make some trade-offs. That's all I have to say. I'm going to wash the dishes. You can figure it out slowly."

After all this commotion, Sakurai Itsuki didn't plan to take a nap. He got up and prepared to wash the dishes, and then officially started today's work.

"Okay! Then I'm going to start practicing too."

Sato Wakaba's sadness only lasted for three seconds, and then she switched to a state of full energy.

Obviously she is not the kind of person who would back down when faced with difficulties.

"Well, I'll send you some videos later to practice describing and coloring. After I finish my new work, you can give it a try."

Sakurai Itsuki looked at the high-spirited Sato Wakaba and temporarily gave up the idea of finding a random reason to kick her out.

You have to test it first to see if it works.
"Great! Then I'm considered an insider!"

Sato Wakaba cheered and waved her fists, as if her sorrow would never last more than three minutes.

Oh, except after reading Sakurai Itsuki's manga.

(End of this chapter)