Wizards are mighty.

Chapter 225

“This foreshadowing can make high-dimensional observers curious about whether a war will really happen later and the impact of the war on the city and the protagonist.”

“In addition, the scene of entering the city, the condition of the city, and the description of the living conditions and population of ordinary people are also very important. These contents can enrich the worldview of the story and allow high-dimensional observers to better understand the background of the city.”

"However, I think the description of the city wall can be more detailed, such as the material of the wall, its height, the facilities on the wall, etc. This will give high-dimensional observers a better sense of the picture. The scene of entering the city can also be described in more details, such as the procedures for entering the city, people's expressions and conversations, which will make the whole scene more vivid."

Q version of Vic described it this way, and then continued to read the following content.

"In the second half of the first main plot, after entering the city, you will find a place to stay, buy supplies, etc. In this process, you should write about the identity gap between professionals and ordinary people, introduce various settings, etc. (such as aristocratic power, chambers of commerce, prices...)"

"Well, the plot after entering the city is arranged reasonably."

“Finding shelter and buying supplies are common but important life scenes that can be used to show the protagonist’s adaptation process in the new environment.”

“And it’s a good point to emphasize the difference in status between professionals and ordinary people. This can highlight the class divisions in this world and allow high-dimensional observers to understand the social background of the story more clearly.”

“It is also necessary to introduce settings such as noble forces, chambers of commerce, and prices. These elements can enrich the economic and political aspects of the story and make the entire world view more complete.”

"However, when describing the search for shelter and the purchase of supplies, some episodes or difficulties can be added, such as the difficulty of finding shelter, the high prices of supplies or the shortage of supplies, which can increase the fun and tension."

Q version of Vic explained it this way.

"The second main plot describes alchemy, selling, and upgrading to level 4 and 5. It will take about 4 months. You can consider adding scenes such as night markets to increase the richness of the plot."

"Foreshadowing can be laid here, such as the old man and the little girl, and the timeline is January."

"Alchemy... not bad."

"Upgrading through alchemy can allow high-dimensional observers to better experience the pleasure of upgrading, and the four-month time span also gives Sean enough room for growth."

“It’s a great idea to add scenes like the night market to enrich the plot. The night market is usually a place full of mystery and various possibilities, and it’s easy for some interesting stories to happen.”

"Hmm... maybe we can describe the alchemy process in more detail, such as the difficulties, breakthroughs, and insights that the protagonist encountered during alchemy. This will allow high-dimensional observers to better understand the protagonist's growth process, etc."

Q version of Vic didn't stop and continued reading.

"The third main plot is about researching potions and wanting to buy materials, but there is a severe shortage of materials in the city. This describes the protagonist's confusion and thinking, laying the groundwork."

“This plot is very suspenseful. Researching the potion only to find that the materials are out of stock is a good conflict setting that will put the protagonist in a difficult situation and thus promote the development of the story.”

“The protagonist’s doubts and thoughts are also described very reasonably, allowing high-dimensional observers to feel the protagonist’s intelligence and caution.” “War and heavy snow are also very interesting as foreshadowing. These two elements are very mysterious, and high-dimensional observers will be curious about their relationship with the shortage of materials.”

“By the way, you can also go deeper when describing the protagonist’s doubts, such as having the protagonist try to think about the reasons for the shortage from different angles, or discuss it with other characters. This will make the story richer.”

"Then, Sean went to the Adventurer's Guild, chatted with them, described the environment and introduced the adventurer's settings (population, etc. could also be introduced), issued the mission, obtained news and war rumors, and went to the tavern to try his luck."

"Well, the arrangement of this plot is very coherent."

“From the Adventurer’s Guild to the Tavern, the story is advanced step by step. Chatting and talking in the Adventurer’s Guild and introducing related settings is a good way to introduce the adventurer groups in this world to high-dimensional observers, including their population, levels, tasks, etc. After issuing the task, getting news and rumors of war also increases the tension and suspense of the story.”

"Of course, we can also be more detailed when describing the environment of the Adventurer's Guild, such as the layout of the guild, the activities of the personnel, etc. This will make high-dimensional observers feel more immersive."

"After arriving at the tavern, the protagonist's pampered life and youth are highlighted by describing his fair complexion and the attitudes of the people in the tavern. After the protagonist takes out the gold coins, the people show their immense greed."

"This description of the tavern scene can make the 'plot' richer."

"The protagonist's identity and status are well highlighted through the contrast between his appearance and the attitudes of the people in the tavern. The greed of the people in the tavern is also very realistic, which is in line with the weakness of human nature."

"Then there is the follow-up content. An adventurer has the materials and wants to blackmail the protagonist. When the protagonist reveals his true identity, he angrily slams the table and tries to force the protagonist to sell the materials (you can write that the smart person next to him thinks about it and guesses the protagonist's professional identity). The protagonist releases the sense of oppression and uses magic to intimidate the adventurer and buys the materials at a low price."

"interesting."

Q version of Vic was visibly excited.

"The adventurer tried to blackmail the protagonist but was countered. It was quite dramatic."

“Sean’s intelligence, wit and strong strength are fully demonstrated, and the guesses of Sean’s identity by the smart people around him also add to the interest of the story.”

“Of course, you can also write more details when Sean releases the sense of oppression and spell intimidation, such as writing more about Sean’s expression, tone and the effect of the spell. This will allow high-dimensional observers to feel the protagonist’s power more.”

"After the acquisition (one seven-leaf white flower, 1 gold coin), the protagonist waited for a while, and when he felt that there was no more harvest, he wanted to leave. A group of people came and had a secret conversation with the protagonist, telling him that there were dozens of seven-leaf white flowers, but because there were monsters on the way, they came to ask for help. They were willing to give the protagonist half of the harvest after the matter was completed, and sell the rest to the protagonist at a low price. The protagonist took a lie detector test, and after the result was confirmed, he joined the protagonist."

“This plot twist is very clever.”

“The ups and downs of the plot, from acquiring a single strain of material to learning that there is more material but that it requires taking risks, are very attractive. The protagonist’s caution is also fully demonstrated through the act of polygraph testing.”

“However, you can be more detailed in describing the process of a group of people coming and having a secret conversation, such as their expressions, tone and reasons. This will allow high-dimensional observers to better understand why the protagonist joined.”

(End of this chapter)